该用户匿名发帖 发表于 2009-9-17 08:57   全显示 1楼
it's good story but I cannot believe that everything happened in a day.  It seems to me a bit too fast even for a mature woman.  If the last 3 or 4 sections of the story can be divided into multiple days, it will make the story more real.  Thanks.
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